Monday, December 10, 2012

The Ghost of Winter

Posted by A Great Liar

The rustle of midnight leaves against the winter wind isn’t the only sound outside his cottage in the wild.

Despairing against the liquor bottle fast drying up, he heard the faint footsteps approaching, realizing that the darkness has come for him.

Gripping the sledgehammer in his hand, he waits for that knock on the door.


This post is written for the Best 55 Fictionist Contest, hosted by Sasikumar Raja Blogs at Beginner

29 comments:

  1. TalithaDecember 10, 2012 at 11:04:00 PM PST

    And it's good...really good.
    All the best!

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  2. UnknownDecember 11, 2012 at 12:04:00 AM PST

    When I Imagine this.... It's really scary... nicely written... All the best bro... me too Keeping my fingers crossed...

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  3. A Great LiarDecember 11, 2012 at 12:52:00 AM PST

    @Talitha: Oh thanks a million, for taking time out to read and for your best wishes. :)

    @Sasikumar: Thanks Sasi. Its a pleasure to contribute :)

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  4. Neha AgarwalDecember 11, 2012 at 1:00:00 AM PST

    scary .. but nice imagination... tough competition... :p

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  5. A Great LiarDecember 11, 2012 at 1:26:00 AM PST

    @Neha Agarwal: Oh thanks a lot. Tough competition it sure is. :)

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  6. Furree KattDecember 11, 2012 at 1:29:00 AM PST

    You should win! This is creepy and excellent.

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  7. A Great LiarDecember 11, 2012 at 4:37:00 AM PST

    @Furree Katt: Oh hey there, long time. Thanks a lot for dropping by and for your kind words :)

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  8. Tanya SehgalDecember 11, 2012 at 6:21:00 AM PST

    Yeah it's way to scary & you wrote the words with a great dramatic appeal. I could really imagine the entire scene. Wonderfully done ! :) All the best. Nice to get back here :) take care!

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  9. Amrit SinhaDecember 11, 2012 at 8:07:00 AM PST

    And then?

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  10. LollyDecember 11, 2012 at 8:46:00 AM PST

    You just may win, Liar! Well done!

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  11. the butterfly effectDecember 11, 2012 at 9:14:00 AM PST

    Well depicted. Although I am kinda glad its only a 55-word story, because if you'd written the whole thing I wouldn't have read it, the scare-dy cat that I am :D

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  12. Anupama K. MazumderDecember 11, 2012 at 9:28:00 PM PST

    I would rather that he shot himself before death imposed on him... the story would have ended.

    www.anucreations.blogspot.in

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  13. A Great LiarDecember 11, 2012 at 9:32:00 PM PST

    @Green Speck: Well, Green Speck, I am afraid its a big fat 'then'. This one was written for a flash fiction competition, with a word limit of extremely miserly 55. Hence there is only so much you can do in 55 words.

    Traditionally, flash fictions, since they happen to be very short, tend to leave a lot to the reader's imagination. Which isnt such a bad thing, to be honest.


    @Lolly: Oh hi there. Thanks a lot! :) And welcum to the blog!


    @the butterfly effect: Oh lolz! Was this one really that scary?
    And btw, I might just elaborate on it in near future, a short story perhaps. Not sure though. I do feel compelled to though. :)

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  14. A Great LiarDecember 11, 2012 at 10:02:00 PM PST

    @Anupama K. Mazumder: Well, perhaps if you will read it one more time, you will realize that there are enough connotations in the closing line to suggest that the story has ended ....

    Welcum to the blog :)

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  15. the butterfly effectDecember 12, 2012 at 2:11:00 AM PST

    the start wasn't scary, but i can only imagine where the story would go. and if it goes on to be scary, i might skip it. i think I've got enough ghosts of my own to haunt me, without reading about the scary ones :P

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  16. the butterfly effectDecember 12, 2012 at 2:12:00 AM PST

    oh, and good luck with it:)

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  17. AnonymousDecember 12, 2012 at 3:22:00 AM PST

    And am waiting door the knock still....wow

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  18. thewhitescapeDecember 12, 2012 at 9:04:00 PM PST

    Hi, just now the voting has started for the fiction contest and i've voted for your entry. i really liked it

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  19. A Great LiarDecember 12, 2012 at 10:55:00 PM PST

    @the butterfly effect: Oh yes, private ghosts indeed. And I wonder which ones are scarier; the ghosts in print or in our minds. Hard to tell at times...

    Thank you so much for your wishes. :D


    @thefactfiction: Thanks a lot, and welcum to the blog. :)


    @thewhitescape: Hey, thanks a million. really :)

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  20. SayantiniDecember 12, 2012 at 11:54:00 PM PST

    Wow..this is really worth reading again and again!!

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  21. A Great LiarDecember 13, 2012 at 12:34:00 AM PST

    @Sayantini Bhattacharya: Thanks a lot for your wonderful comment.
    And welcum to the blog :)

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  22. Red HandedDecember 13, 2012 at 2:19:00 AM PST

    Now that was wonderful....he does not plan on surrendering ....not yet!!

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  23. A Great LiarDecember 13, 2012 at 9:10:00 PM PST

    @Red Handed: Yes, fight against the dying of light.

    Thank you so much for dropping by and your kind comments, :)

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  24. deepsDecember 13, 2012 at 11:09:00 PM PST

    just three sentences and wow
    ghost and deep

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  25. JerlyDecember 13, 2012 at 11:39:00 PM PST

    Hmmmm...I think I may not be able to write a story in 55 words.I think its a most difficult challenge. Good to see u attempted and the words are powerful. It seems the guy lives in a haunted place and hears footsteps often but this time it is at his door and he has planned to fight it...and Yet there is that question...what then?!!!!!!! maybe he could have found it to be.....a cat? Some twist to the story???? leaving the readers with the thought that maybe what we fear so often all through 100 pages turns out to be nothing! Reminded me of a poem I wrote for a challenge! http://jerlyt.blogspot.in/2011/11/lighting-candle.html

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  26. AnonymousDecember 17, 2012 at 6:26:00 AM PST

    hey congratulations..!! for being the winner in this contest...yippee!! well deserved..my vote did count :)

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  27. the butterfly effectDecember 17, 2012 at 9:46:00 AM PST

    Congratulations:)

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  28. A Great LiarDecember 17, 2012 at 11:15:00 PM PST

    @deeps: Thanks a milion, deeps :)

    @Jerley: Thank you so much for your wonderful comment. :) And I will be going thru the link very soon. Thanks a lot for sharing :)

    @thewhitescape: Oh, thank you so very much for your vote, cant appreciate enuff. It indeed was a crucial one. :)

    @the butterfly effect: Oh thank you so much Mahnoor. Very nice of you :D

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  29. Husna AftabJanuary 15, 2013 at 12:31:00 AM PST

    purely written! waiting for the door to open. Excellent!

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